What do you think so far?

the first article was a little but confusing and a little bit go aroundish, but that was interesting. The poor girl. Please don't say that Dr. Aloiki is a vampire. I have no grudges against vampires but right now that is being way overdone and this story would be a lot better if you go somwhere with it rather than the obvious. Good idea though, definately one you should keep writing